Asuka - 'Once More With Feeling' Formal Dress

Once upon a time, there was a Neon Genesis Evangelion fanfic, Once More With Feeling, and it was pretty good. In one of the later chapters, there is a school dance, and Asuka gets dressed up for it. Ten hundred billion years ago, some guy on DeviantArt whose username I don't remember recommended the fanfic to me and suggested I draw Asuka's look for the dance, which I did.

More recently, I redrew Asuka in her dance ensemble, and was pleased with the second attempt. Here it is. This is the second attempt.

If you're curious, the description of Asuka's dress from OMWF is as follows:
It started with an embroidered strip perhaps one and a half centimeters thick that wrapped around her elegant neck, crossing just under her throat, thickening to a modest width halfway down each of her breasts to create a thin triangular shaped gap in the precise center of her chest, as the embroidered pattern gave way to pure, smooth, silk that resonated in the sunset. The 'outer' edge of the 'strips' continued down, cupping around her outer chest and wrapping around both flanks of her slender body to meet just above the small of her back, the scarlet dress closing in on her hips before flaring out again to partially cloak her legs, though the knee length slit somewhat defeated the purpose of hiding her legs –if indeed it ever was a design goal of the dress.